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xtrinox, December 21st, 2010, 11:11 pm
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Hehe, great hero shot.


DJKID (Guest), February 2nd, 2011, 2:23 pm
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I've been meaning to tell you how much I love this comic. The designs and characters are so fun and original, you can't help but immediately connect with them. I'm especially interested in Cavelier, but ain't that always the case with bad boys? 8D

Onto the bad news, I can't help feeling that the introduction was extremely rushed. We don't have names or explanations for anything. A page or two extra could really have fleshed this chapter out. For example, having Krissy look over at a poster for the joint she plans to perform at while saying, "Lets show 'em what we've got!" would easily establish for us that she wants to be a performer.

I do think Rahkhi should be left vague for now, but perhaps showing her walking (sadly?) through the desert and spotting Krissy would take some of the stress off of *BAM! There she is!* Or perhaps including a few more lines of dialog between her and Krissy before hopping immediately over to Cavelier.

Why is Cavelier out in the middle of nowhere? Why does he want the drum? What would he do with it? Why are Rahkhi and Krissy unphased by the undead? Is necromancy common practice these days or what? Why does a skeleton need to eat? (OK, that last one's over thinking it a bit)

I'm sure all questions will be answered as the series continues, but it's the introduction's job to establish and immerse us in the world. With how quickly everything occurred, it feels like we've barely scratched the surface, and can be a little off-putting.

ETA: I just realized I'll never know if you reply to this since I'm a guest lol! You can find me on DA under the same name :)


LazyCat (Guest), March 14th, 2011, 1:36 am
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He/she TALKS!!!! Sorry I can't tell what gender.

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